Narrative Writing

 For the past two weeks, Room 10 has been learning how to write narrative stories. After unpacking the structural features and the language features of a narrative writing, the students were given a picture prompt to write a narrative about. Here is what Daniel and Tavyn wrote.

Structural Features	Narrative Writing	Language Features
Introduction Build up the problem  The Problem The Resolution  Ending	On a sunny day when the sun was shining like a laser, It was Kate's birthday, her Dad bought Kate a swing set. Except Dad bought the non-built swing set, and he forgot to buy the pre-built swing set (stupid Dad). They couldn’t refund it, because Kate already ripped the box open like a monster, when it came to the doorstep. They had to build it before the screws got lost. Kate started to go get the parts while Dad looked at the instructions, there were a lot of screws on the ground and barely any of them were attached. The swing was very wobbly; it looked like it was going to fall and kill someone. Kate was scared, so she stepped away from the swing. Before she could tell dad the swing set with 85% of the screws fell… Dad got injured when the swing set fell on him, Kate didn’t know what to do, so she went inside the house and screamed Mum quickly came to Kate. Katie told her Mum about what happened, Mum quickly ran, then tripped and fell on the glass table. Kate’s Mum told her to call the ambulance and 111. Kate quickly called 111. The Phone answered and Kate told everything to the Man. The Man asked Kate her address. Kate told the man her address. Minutes later, the ambulance arrived at Kate’s home. The ambulance took mum and dad to the hospital because both of them were badly injured. Kate waited a while until her Mum came and sat next to her. Weeks later, dad got healed. We went in a car and drove to the hospital. Dad looked like a mummy. He had a lot of casts, it was all over his body. Months later, Dad's broken bones were healed. It was Kate’s birthday again, Dad wanted to buy a better swing set but then he accidentally, bought the same swing set again (STUPID DAD).	Who What When  Where  Why  How Something Goes wrong Resolution Include Details Interesting sentence starters

Recount - Trip to Ambury Farm

 

Trip to the Ambury Farm

 On Thursday 29 October Room 9 and Room 10 went to the Ambury Farm in Mangere.

It was fun and awesome because we got a chance to feed the goats, sheep, and cows.  We also saw how cows are milked.  The cows were pet cows. Their names were Maggie and Fly. 

We also watched  Karoline shear a sheep around the tail area to prevent all the poop from collecting on the fur. 

We all got a chance of making butter from milk. After the butter was made, we tasted it. I learned a lot of things

 about animals, at Ambury Farm that day and I hope I can go there again. 

By AJ

Narrative

The Tunnel

She had been tracking the deer. Her parents had taught her how.

One hour before, finding the hoof prints in the soft earth, she had followed the trail of broken twigs and occasional nibbled leaf until she had located it. Creeping slowly and quietly, not making even the slightest sound, she remained undetected.

She had stumbled across the mysterious circles in a clearing in the forest and watched as the deer approached them. With a slight twitch of its ears, the deer stepped indifferently through the first circle and vanished. Completely vanished.

The girl let out a gasp and walked towards the circles to investigate…she soon then stepped inside the circle which had teleported her to a stranded island, she was confused “where had the deer gone” thought Alice then she heard the slightest footsteps.

“HELLO!” she shouted, “WHOEVER YOU ARE SHOW YOURSELVES!” then a boy appeared about the same age but slightly older than Alice, Alice said “oh hello I didn’t mean to shout but what’s your name?”, The boy replied confidently “Levi, what’s yours?”, “Alice!, nice to meet you” Alice answered with a big smile on her face. After introducing each other they shook each other’s hands and asked each other “how did you get here?”Alice said “ok I will answer first, so basically I followed a deer and the deer led me here but the strange thing is the deer isn’t here…...ok so that's how I got here how did you get here?” Levi answered “SAME!, I mean by I also followed a deer and that's how I got here”.

After a lot of talking they fell asleep on a patch of grass……
“Yawn” Alice yawned as she woke up from a nice sleep, “Good Morning,” Levi said as he was catching a lot of big fish for breakfast, Alice was surprised and asked, “How did you learn how to fish!?” Levi answered “My dad taught me well before I got stuck here”, “ohhhhhh” Alice replied.

After eating the fish….
“WOW!, that was so delicious thanks for cooking Levi,” Alice said surprisingly, “Your welcome!” Levi said with a smile on his face, “Wanna go exploring?” Levi asked Alice answered “Of course!” so off they went exploring until they found the weird-looking circles again! They went inside the circle but first, they had to say goodbye to each other “we will see again soon best friend” Alice said walking inside the circle but as she went inside she realized that she was not going anywhere and that is because she wasn’t going in the circle as she thought! Because the circle was on the other side, Levi and Alice Laughed their nose out and after, she went in the circle saying “bye”, Levi followed next.

Now they are home they never saw each other again but their friendship remained.

By Alyanna